Love

Do i have to say the words (original)

August 3, 2008

these are the original words for the poem. For some reason, i didnt like it and changed it to the previous version (that can be seen here)

its been a tough day
running from pillar to post
i am scarred by you
and i do not know what to do

got to go shopping
got stuff to do
got lots of things to do
and i do not know what to do

all alone with the tv blaring loudly
i hear nothing except the words you said
i pick the phone to call you right away
then i realize i dont have your number!

can’t believe i would fall again
can’t believe it would come to this
can’t believe my dreams would be filled by your thoughts
and i end up waking up wanting to see you everyday!

It’s a shame the weekend is two full days
two full days of living like a fish out of water
like a full moon on a black night sky
even in darkness your face is what I see

i don’t care who you are!
i don’t care what you did!
i don’t care about anything else!
except your present and our future

i miss you, i love you
with thoughts of you tattooed in my mind
with my words screaming your name
rescure me darling, do i have to say the words?

  • Raji Krishnan August 3, 2008 at 11:30 pm

    i dont see any reason why u didnt like it.. it’s good really!

  • blindwreck August 4, 2008 at 3:13 am

    You almost dialled her number in some post but didnt and now you dont have her number at all??? something fishy i say πŸ˜›

  • Praveen August 4, 2008 at 3:38 am

    raji,

    its just that i thought its very broken and i wasnt happy with the outcome

  • Praveen August 4, 2008 at 3:39 am

    blindwreck,

    the other one was written a long long time ago.. maybe even 2+ yrs ago.

    diff times, diff person πŸ™‚

    see, u r thinking a lot πŸ˜‰

  • blindwreck August 4, 2008 at 3:54 am

    now that really makes me think a lot!! hummphhhh!!! πŸ˜‰

  • "Real"writer17 August 6, 2009 at 12:29 pm

    This I feelnis very different from your usual work I like it a lot you really let the reader make their own imfrences I’d like to email you and ask you about your inspiration and technique

  • raj November 15, 2010 at 1:17 am

    u write really well n in a way that anyone can understand easily.
    The flow of emotions continues till the end n after end it does not allow us to stop thinking abt it………

    I luv to read your poems though am new to internet or online poetry.

    rdgs,
    raj mawat